Hear's an example of how we write for the corporate intranet at Virtucon.
We're moving an office and explain the reason:
The new location has many benefits (enhanced people development, increased synergies, etc) and is expected to provide even better service for its worldwide clients.
Can't believe we're just going to include the business rationale for an office move as a parenthetical comment. Guess the reader can fill in the rest with whatever they'd like to characterize as a benefit in that "etc."
I think we're starting to doubt our own press.
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